Would these Lyrics win me a Rap battle?

Honestly, this isn't bad. There are some funny moments, some decent punchlines; overall, though I don't think this will win you a battle (unless you friends are on the same/lower level of writing as you). Good battling isn't only about punchlines (although they are important), but it's also about lyrical structure and multisyllabic rhyming. Anyone can think of a joke. Someone who thinks of a joke and manages to put it in an exceptionally dope rap line is much more rare. I think you'll do alright with this, but if you're really serious about winning, hit up my fiverr page and you will straight up demolish your friends. a href="http://fiverr.com/users/kgilmore465/gigs/write-a-guaranteed-dope-32-bar-rap-verse-in-any-rap-style" rel="nofollow"http://fiverr.com/users/kgilmore465/gigs…/a Peace.